Novel Extract for Critique 005: Criss Cross by Caron Allan
Welcome to Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group and the fifth novel extract on this blog. This 4,982-word extract is from ‘Criss Cross’, a crime novel by Caron Allan. Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this extract and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated! I will chip in but I’ll let others have a go first. 🙂
Caron asks, “Please let me know how I can improve synopsis and tagline skills, feedback on cover and general HELP! with writing style and content.”
Tagline: Monica killed Cressida’s mother-in-law, what could be fairer than Cressida kills Monica’s philandering husband? After all, they are best friends.
Synopsis: Spoilt society girl Cressida Barker-Powell confides to her journal that she plans to murder her unbearable mother-in-law. But when she arrives at the scene, she finds the old woman already dead. Obviously her Hitchcock-Movie-loving best pal, Monica, has already carried out the deed for her! Taking the murder-switch idea from the movie, Cressida decides the only proper way to show her gratitude is by killing off Monica’s philandering husband and his bimbo girlfriend. After all, Monica of all people should appreciate the idea of swapping murders? That’s what she wants, right? No. Cressida quickly discovers that unfortunately this was not what her friend had in mind, and now Monica is devastated and planning to exact a terrible revenge. Which means their friendship is definitely over. Isn’t it?
Sun 24 June
To my darling Cressida
Happy Birthday, Sweetheart! Have fun writing down all your thoughts and plans and dreams, then, when we’re old and grey we can sit together on that terrace in Capri and watch the sun go down, we can drink a glass of wine and you can read me the spicy bits from this journal and we will have a jolly good laugh and talk about the old days!
With all my love forever and ever
Same day – 10.35pm
She must die!!!! I hate her!!! I refuse to put up with her a moment longer, she is an evil, conniving old bitch without a grain of family feeling and it’s time she was dead!!!!